Once upon a time there was a kid name Chris and he was 12
years old his height was 5’5. He’s still in elementary school in the sixth
grade. One day Chris walked home and he saw a park with a basketball court,
Chris loved basketball so he went to the court and he saw other kids playing
b-ball. He was watching, then a kid asked him “if he wanted to play”? he
replied with a “yes”. They played for a good hour and half and when they were
ready to leave Chris looked in his backpack and one of his shoes was gone. He
was crying looking for his shoe because he barley got those a week ago, he
thought that his mom was going to be mad at him. A kid name Bryan went to the
park and played ball at 10pm, it was pretty late and he shot and ran at the
hoop and tripped over a shoe, it was blue and white so he left it there and
went home .
I liked how they were playing basketball. you should put in more detail? did he ever get his shoe back. -Gabe
ReplyDeletegood job on your detail it makes us picture your character.
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